Short Story: First MMA Fight
by The Ruiner on Feb 1, 2012 4:18 PM EST
Email
Print
I've seen so many great fanposts lately that I thought I'd have a go myself. I've written a fictional short story about a female MMA fighter's first bout. Tell me what you think.
I lost today. Quite spectacularly. The woman I was fighting, even though it was my first amateur match, was miles ahead of me in every way. To be honest I am a little bit angry with the matchmaker for thinking she was an appropriate opponent. Maybe her coaches paid off the matchmaker so her opponents will be fearful when she moves up to the pro circuit. I have no idea. I just feel like I wasn’t even given a fair chance.
So anyway… the fight. This is based both on my recollection and my coaches telling me what happened, which says a lot about how it went really. I stood across from her and lifted my glove up to ask whether she wanted to touch gloves. She shook her head. I thought ‘Ok, she might come out aggressively then’… which she did. The ref started the bout and she quickly moved in to throw a right cross, which caught me on the end of the nose. I started to circle right, away from her power hand, and she popped me with two sharp jabs that were much more powerful than I was expecting. I immediately decided to get the fight to the ground.
I stupidly shot in without waiting for her to strike and she threw a knee that hit me right on the chin. My coaches told me that my legs went out from under me and she took me down to the ground. I turned on to my side to try and avoid her mount but she used the opportunity to turn me over and lock in a rear naked choke. By the time I gathered my bearings it was locked in too tightly for me to be able to pull her arms away. I didn’t tap and slipped under.
Strangely, I had a brief dream when I lost consciousness. I was in some woods during the day. There were white flower petals all over the ground. There was a path in front of me leading directly forward. I saw something moving towards me in the distance at a great speed. Before I had time to think I realised it was a man, about four feet tall, running at great speed. I went to say something to him but he reached me, leapt into the air, and punched me square in the mouth.
In that moment I snapped back to reality. There were people surrounding me so I knew it must have been bad. My coaches told me that I had lost due to RNC. I nodded, and slowly stood up.
The ref was holding my opponent’s hand in the air. After her win was announced she came over to me and thanked me for the fight. It was probably just obligatory considering how poorly I did.
Sigh… I think I will take 6 months off before I even consider fighting again. I will still train, I do love training, in fact I like it more than fighting for some strange reason. I just love MMA, but she is a harsh mistress. Maybe if I take 6 months to train as hard as possible I can be the overpowered one the next time I fight.
Oh well. Until next time.
The End.
82 comments
|
Add comment
|
2 recs |
Do you like this story?
Comments
Reminds me of my loss in my 3rd fight
I came out and tried to touch gloves, the dude didn’t do it, kind of threw me off a bit.
I threw a couple pawing jabs and he started throwing heavy hooks, none of which landed. I went to clinch but couldn’t hold onto him and he ducked under and got a sloppy takedown where I fell on my knees, I prepared for strikes but he grabbed a rear naked choke. I couldn’t get out and I refused to tap, got put to sleep. I remember having funky dreams myself, though I don’t recall what they were. Everyone told me I woke up laughing though, that I do remember.
I asked for a rematch and got it a month later. Dominated the rematch, and still no touch of gloves. I don’t understand that, but whatever.
Good story man, opened up a memory for me. Rec’d
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
haha good stuff.
When you looking to fight again?
You should do a fanpost with all your fights (with videos) and your thoughts before, during and after, that be pretty cool.
Show no mercy; for you shall receive none
I was supposed to fight on Feb. 18th
but my gym closed down on Jan. 1st, and I have nowhere to train. There’s a new place I’m gonna check out tomorrow night, and some guys who have a gym in a town about an hour away are thinking of opening one in this area next month.
Until I have a place to train, and as long as it’s before I go to the police academy in July I’m not rushing. I want to show up in shape and ready, too many amateurs in this area fight with no training and that’s insane to me, but the promotors let them do it because it’s free to them(except insurance) and it brings in a larger crowd.
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
Wow major suckage not being able to find a gym to properly train at.
too many amateurs in this area fight with no training and that’s insane to me, but the promotors let them do it because it’s free to them(except insurance) and it brings in a larger crowd.
Tell me about it. Best of luck though.
Show no mercy; for you shall receive none
What would make you want to be a cop ?
Serious question .
You are banned from Bloody Elbow.
You can browse the blog, but you can't participate.
Insulting staff and using the word "***" are both completely inappropriate. So long.
by randallhumpfreeze on Feb 1, 2012 6:47 PM EST up reply actions
To fuck with some assholes life like you ;)
"The Pride has broken my spirit worse than Nog’s arm. I should probably just skip the money pool and send him my money now"
by thunderdownunder on Feb 1, 2012 8:38 PM EST up reply actions
My grandfather was a cop, died on duty saving kids
my stepgrandfather was a cop, retired.
my uncle was a detective, he retired.
I believe(naively) that the law has a place in this world, and I think that people who do things that are bad should be punished. There are two types of laws, ones that are laws because they have always been wrong, (murder, rape, stealing), and then there are mala prohibita which are just laws because they were passed, (prostitution, drugs, gambling). I don’t think all laws are just, but I think the police do more good than ill in our society and are needed.
I feel like I should be doing something about it. Does that make sense?
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
I really wouldn't want to be a city cop
I couldn’t deal with the mala prohibita part
You are banned from Bloody Elbow.
You can browse the blog, but you can't participate.
Insulting staff and using the word "***" are both completely inappropriate. So long.
by randallhumpfreeze on Feb 1, 2012 9:41 PM EST up reply actions
there's a good chance I'll find work in either Detroit or Grand Rapids
because that’s where they are hiring.
There are two types of laws, mala in se or however you spell it which are the core laws, (think ten commandments)
a lot of laws that fall under Mala prohibita are bullshit, but when I’m hired in I can’t decide what laws to enforce. It’s part of life though
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
Good luck with your career. You will be scorned and underappreciated by most people.
"To thine own self be true, and it must follow, as the night the day, thou canst not then be false to any man." - William Shakespeare (Hamlet, Act 1, Scene 3)
thanks man
It always cracks me up when people says “FUCK THE POLICE.”
yet who do they call when something happens? The police.
Who helps them to the best of their ability? the police(most of the time, you do hear fucked up stories)
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
I blame Rap
and mounties
You are banned from Bloody Elbow.
You can browse the blog, but you can't participate.
"I didn't get banned...at least not yet". Well now you did. -Scott H
Sig bet record 2-5, next up Cruz Jackson Diaz vs Condit, have Diaz
fuck Canada!
South Park Reference I live like 2 1/2’s from Canada… never met a Canadian I didn’t like.
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
2 1/2 what?
Feet? Kilometers? Hours? Parsecs?
When a Texan decides to take his chances, you know chances will be taken.
Well, to be fair, I personally have LOTS of reasons why police officers should not be trusted but I choose to not judge them all in one fell swoop (so to speak).
"To thine own self be true, and it must follow, as the night the day, thou canst not then be false to any man." - William Shakespeare (Hamlet, Act 1, Scene 3)
by OJR on Feb 2, 2012 2:45 PM EST up reply actions
I've been in more than one discussion with people over that
The percentage of police officer misconduct is lower than teachers and clergy.
It’s just a messed up world though…
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
so was this you, ruiner?.. or someone who fought cyborg?
good post none the less.
dont be upset about a loss.. be proud you had the guts to get in there and do something you enjoy!.. alot of people who love mma, just watch..
sucker free boss!~
I wasn't sure if it's it is a Chick, if Ruiner is than my bad....
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
short story, no one specific
I’ve written a short story
pride never die.
Damn good stuff....haha no idea you were female :p
And its ok dont trip its your first fight, you still have plenty time to develop and grow as a fighter. Shit Anderson lost his first fight.
Also a video would be nice. DO you have an amateur record?
Also this:
I just love MMA, but she is a harsh mistress.
=deep shit.
Show no mercy; for you shall receive none
what, no one bothers to read anymore?
I’ve written a short story
pride never die.
I read that part
but sometimes a short story is based on ones personal experiences. I used to have to do that for creative writing classes.
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
It wasn’t based on personal experience. I just love MMA and thought I’d write a story about it. Lol, apparently it’s realistic enough that people can’t tell the difference which is kind of cool.
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
it probably comes down to involving a female being knocked out
most men will sympatize with it and rush to comment on it
pride never die.
my bad
not that is not well written, since i can’t honestly give you any actual critic on it
pride never die.
not a real story?
i take my rec back. lol
sucker free boss!~
by stinky~fingers on Feb 2, 2012 2:58 AM EST up reply actions
it's an entertaining story, though
pride never die.
one of my classes I wrote about the first time I sparred
and got my ass handed to me. It’s cool when you can bring people into an experience. And the face that it rings true adds credence to your short story
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
LOL
it needs clarified that it is fiction…
The beauty of the Second Amendment is that it will not be needed until they try to take it. - Thomas Jefferson
lmao
that’s a cute cat and yes, yes, i know, bloody elbow fag, whatever. I like cats, sue me
pride never die.
My name is P-Dub, and I have a cat.
When a Texan decides to take his chances, you know chances will be taken.
i see joe benavidez has been busy in everyones imagination lately
Before I had time to think I realised it was a man, about four feet tall, running at great speed. I went to say something to him but he reached me, leapt into the air, and punched me square in the mouth.
i wonder where do you draw inspiration from. Most of us whom been around for a while, will tell you life is a lot like your story: constantly matched up against bigger challenges than you prepared for.
pride never die.
For full and absolute clarification I was lying in bed and an idea popped into my head about writing a short story about MMA. It was originally going to be about a couple who both had MMA fights on the same night and how the chick’s went badly but the guy’s went well. Then when I started writing it in my journal it came across as more of a diary entry.
In a way I guess it was influenced by how I imagine my first fight would go.
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
it never goes the way you expect it to
you expect to get beaten up and busted up or you expect to dominate. I didn’t even get hit properly in my opinion until my 6th fight.
It’s a weird experience getting in the cage.
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
What’s your record like? Can you tell me a bit more about your fights?
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
I'm 5-1
I can give you links to vids of 5 of my fights, nothing special but at least I have them.
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
That would be cool, thanks.
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
There ya go. Not the highest skill level, but at least I got in there.
First fight) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=gW2Vs2sXqBs
Third fight) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=uBntMgOmnRk
Forth Fight) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wqsbgX8_JgU
Fifth Fight) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wwyemd7uMpA
Sixth Fight) http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SyCO4aXhrj4&
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
what's weird is Rob King is fight Brett Evans on Feb 18th
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
Wow, they were all so quick and action packed. You seem very well rounded.
Oh, and I meant to ask yesterday, have you posted your short story on here?
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
haha no I didn't post it on here
I wrote it for a class about a year ago, I don’t have the file anymore. :P
I mostly do my preview articles on here. I’ve been trying to finish a short novel for a like a year but I can’t get the motivation.
I have a lot to work on staying patient on the feet, I’m a better striker than what the last fight shows. In sparring I use a lot of feints and kicks. I favor using the double jab to set up clinches and using jab, right cross, switch kick to the liver, and jab, right cross leg kick, and a jab, upper cut, left hook to the body.
On the ground I like top control, but I have no issue working for guard, there are a lot of wrestlers in MMA and I did high school wrestling so I don’t have any experience there.
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
I hope you don’t mind me asking a bit more about your short novel. What is it about?
I’m actually reading a book at the moment called ‘the complete handbook of novel writing’. Even though I am only into writing short stories and the books focus is on full novels it still has tonnes of advice on everything from structure, to what makes a good beginning, middle and end, to pacing, to writing from different perspectives.
Have you read it? The writing thing is pretty new to me. I used to write in high school, then I hadn’t written anything for years and one day I felt like writing a story for my partner, and the urge kind of stuck with me. It feels good to be teaching myself something new I have to say, there is so much to learn.
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
no worries
I’ve read a few guidebooks, everything from screenplay writing to short story stuff. It’s been hobby since I was a kid, but I’ve never taken it as seriously has I could have. I like 3rd person view point, with insight into what the main character is thinking/feels. But I have never gotten into writing in the first person, I’ve never enjoyed it.
The thing I’ve been working on is horror story/coming of age thing. It’s about a group of youths that go on a camping trip on the other side of the mountain. It’s rite of passage for the town and mostly it’s just to blow off steam before the school year starts. There’s a legend about an evil witch, so on and so forth. Basically it’s about Jack getting his friends back safely.
If i was to ever finish it it’s for young adults only I’m not shy about the violence/swearing. It’s just for fun anyway. Right now, it’s about 15,000 words, and my goal is/was about 60-70,000
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
Awesome. I am happy with any perspective, whatever works really. I do think I lean more towards first person because I am quite introspective and I can put a lot of myself in to my characters. I guess it’s easier to write that way, but I’m hoping through reading as many books as possible I will learn to form characters that aren’t similar to me at all.
It’s all a learning process.
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
I agree with that
read as many books as possible, novel or otherwise. To be a good writer you need to be a good reader. I heard that somewhere and I agree with it.
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
Yeah, the other day I was reading samples of books about short story writing on Amazon and every book said that.
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
Man, it’s so daunting. They just reference classic book after classic book and the only one I’ve read is The Old Man And The Sea.
I feel so far behind in terms of literature. I left high school quite early so I missed out on tonnes of reading. It makes me want to go back and do Year 12 English. (that’s the last year of school before Uni in Australia)
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
yeah I thought you might be Aussie
I was there for training once and liberty. Townsville and Brisbane.
When it comes to books and reading, all you need is a library, nothing stops people from reading great books but their own stubbornness. Jules Verne, HG Wells, Charles Dickens, the books are already there.
"I am the tomato can that crushed your champion, live with it."
though kim would be more like it
pride never die.
I’ve seen so many great fanposts lately that I thought I’d have a go myself
This can be interpreted in so many ways. Awesome way to kick it off.
A positive attitude may not solve all your problems, but it will annoy enough people to make it worth the effort. - Herm Albright
my fav was the BE thread
followed closely by ABB’s interview with Cain Velasquez
Upcoming sig bet with OilCan - Diaz/Condit
Note to self - don't bet against Diaz but I just can't help doing it....again
by hairybumcrack on Feb 1, 2012 6:32 PM EST up reply actions
fuck bloody elbow
You are banned from Bloody Elbow.
You can browse the blog, but you can't participate.
Insulting staff and using the word "***" are both completely inappropriate. So long.
by randallhumpfreeze on Feb 1, 2012 9:41 PM EST up reply actions
the BE thread was hilarious
You are banned from Bloody Elbow.
You can browse the blog, but you can't participate.
"I didn't get banned...at least not yet". Well now you did. -Scott H
Sig bet record 2-5, next up Cruz Jackson Diaz vs Condit, have Diaz
so sad to see it die
Pro Sig record:12-6
1 Month sig bet with 10th Degree Whitebelt that DJ does NOT win the FLW tournament
Sig bet with KaleJohnCox on Alves-Kamp. ALVES
Sig bet with NNR on Kos-Pierce. KOSCHECK
STOCKTON MOTHERFUCKERS
everyone had a story of why they got banned hahaha
You are banned from Bloody Elbow.
You can browse the blog, but you can't participate.
Insulting staff and using the word "***" are both completely inappropriate. So long.
by randallhumpfreeze on Feb 1, 2012 10:27 PM EST up reply actions
someone shud make another
just a sharing of how u got banned. wud be a good friday post
Pro Sig record:12-6
1 Month sig bet with 10th Degree Whitebelt that DJ does NOT win the FLW tournament
Sig bet with KaleJohnCox on Alves-Kamp. ALVES
Sig bet with NNR on Kos-Pierce. KOSCHECK
STOCKTON MOTHERFUCKERS
well i skimmed it..
and you can write…but please…please don’t start drawing pictures to accompany the stories..lol..
Funnily enough I did visual arts at Uni. But cartoons are not really my thing so you don’t have to worry about that.
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
lol..yeah i was just taking a stab at Mot....it seems to be the thing to do..
all good..no doubt you can draw too…just don’t turn out to be a super hot and cool chick and we won’t have to cat fight..lol (totally joking) this place needs more birds..and you are the intelligent type..and i am the crude and silly type..so it’s a balance !!
lol, yeah I’m not the cat fight type anyway.
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
i notice you didn't refute being a hot, cool chick
this thread is worthless without pics
only half-kidding!
pride never die.
Lol. I posted a couple of pics in the Unmask thread, right at the end of the third page. I am definitely a cool chick, I know that much. Looks wise I am just normal. Typical large-built red head with skin as white as the sun.
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
Where the fuck is the sun white?
Sig Bet:
4-2,
Condit over Diaz - Shivan"Diesel"Tiger
by Cruz Jackson on Feb 2, 2012 4:02 PM EST via mobile up reply actions
You’ve never looked directly at the sun? It’s pure white. Then when you look away you’re left with pink and green images burnt into your retina for a while.
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
Because I am insane. When I was younger I went through a ‘try to gain as much knowledge about the world through watching movies and trying new things’ phase and wondered what colour the residual image would be if I stared at the sun for a few seconds. Sure enough, pink flashing to green flashing to pink and so on for about a minute.
I am not normal, that is pretty clear.
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
It's yellow as piss. White as snow was a better comparrison.
I’m just buggin ya. I wont look at the sun cause it hurts. And good story.
Sig Bet:
4-2,
Condit over Diaz - Shivan"Diesel"Tiger
by Cruz Jackson on Feb 2, 2012 4:21 PM EST via mobile up reply actions
Thanks. And I think it’s more yellow depending on how much pollution is in your area. Some nights in the centre of the city of Melbourne it is a deep orange.
MMA is like a puzzle, it's just a matter of finding a solution to each situation.
the hot chick (i haven't seen the pics yet) is right, though
the sun burns bright white due to his high temperature, we see it yellow because of ozone and all the other shit in our way, same as with the skies, not entirely blue but that’s the color we perceive.
pride never die.
i'll have to stop over there
i missed’em.
actually i missed the 2nd and 3rd threads for that matter
pride never die.
Something to say? Choose one of these options to log in.
Secondary Sidebar
User Tools
FanPosts
Community blog posts and discussion.
